Vovan
מקווה שתאהבו!

One week at the Summer

Vovan 09/05/2012 681 צפיות 3 תגובות
מקווה שתאהבו!

Why didn’t you look at me?
Why didn’t you hear me?
Why,Why,Why……

On a shiny Sunday morning
I was still at home.
Then I decided to call you
But my head didn’t answer

On a shiny Monday morning
I was still at the work.
Every hour was a nightmare
without you!!!!!

Why didn’t you call me?
Why this Summer was so terrible?
So I,and you,we like atwo ships on the ocean!
Why didn’t you…..Why didn’t you….

On a shiny Tuesday morning
I was still at the park.
Then I saw you,but you didn’t see me…..

On a shiny Wednesday morning
I was still with freinds.
We went to the movie,
And we met you!!

Why didn’t you call me?
Why this Summer was so terrible?
So I,and you,we like atwo ships on the ocean!
Why didn’t you…..Why didn’t you….

On a shiny Thursday morning
I was still outside.
I took my phone,and run to you!

On a shiny Friday morning…..
I was still at the garadge…….
It was the start of the Automn…….
Behind the car,I saw something tall!
You took my hand,and we went to the park!!!

Why didn’t you call me?
Why did the Automn just start?
So I,and you,we like a one-big-ship on the ocean!!
So lets go….So lets go…….

One week at the Summer
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תגובות (3)

אהבתי, אכןןןן אהבתי (;
מגניבוש שאתה כותב שירים באנגלית, מחכה ליצירותייך הבאות! (:

09/05/2012 08:53

I was still at the work.
לא צריך את ה – the.

Why this Summer was so terrible?
Why WAS this summer so terrible?

we like atwo ships on the ocean!
We ARE like two ships IN the ocean.
בגלל שזה תיאור, חייבים את are. בגלל שזה רבים, אין צורך ב – a ובאוקיינוס זה In בגלל שאתה נמצא בתוכו, ולא עליו.

I took my phone,and run to you!
and RAN to you
התחלת בעבר, סיים בעבר.

I was still at the garadge…….
I was still at th GARAGE

It was the start of the Automn…….
It was the start of the AUTUMN.

חוץ מזה – יפה מאוד !

09/05/2012 10:07

אהבתי מאד מאד מאד תמשיך ♥♥

09/05/2012 10:44
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