Angel & Devil – Prologue

Zoey 30/05/2020 540 צפיות 6 תגובות

.And there I was
.Kneeling, my head bowed
.And there he was
.Sitting on a black throne. The devil. The most dangerous being of all
.And there they were
His minions, all around me, just waiting for the word from him to run their swords through me. I could practically feel their dark anticipation
.in the air. They were craving it
How did it come to this? I asked myself in amazement. Just 24 hours ago I was at my home in California, reading my favorite book, Angel & Devil. When all of a sudden I was in that book. In that story. In that
And as if that wasn’t enough, I’m apparently also the protagonist now. Or at least, everyone thinks I’m her – Vivian, the brave warrior. And Vivian, the real Vivian, is nowhere to be found. If she’s even alive or in
.this world, that is
So now? Now I’m kneeling in front of Vivian’s arch enemy – The Devil.
.And he must think I’m Vivian, too. So, basically? I’m a goner
.Never give up
.I wanted to laugh, or cry, or maybe do both
It sounds so easy when you read it in the books. When the MC says it to themselves or when someone says it to them. When you’re reading it from the comfort of your home, you’re filled with hope and pride. “You
.can do it! Don’t give up! I know you can do it!” You silently think
But they don’t know you’re telling them that. They don’t know you believe in them. They are characters in a book. They don’t know if they’ll succeed. Just like you and me, they don’t know what their future holds. And when you don’t know any of it, never giving up is the
.hardest thing someone could ever ask you to do
Because for never giving up you need to believe in yourself. Completely. You need to have complete faith in yourself or it won’t
.And right now? I can’t say I’m my biggest fan
It only took me one day to undo everything Vivian worked so hard to achieve. In just one day I brought destruction to the villages beyond the wasteland, got my only allies in this place captured or killed, and to top it all: got myself captured by Vivian’s arch enemy and the most
.terrifying being of all – the devil
.So you understand why it’s not the best day to believe in myself
Which brings us back to the here and now… me, kneeling. My head bowed. Him, sitting on a black throne. And his minions, just waiting for
.the word to end me
I could feel his gaze on me. If he was even a he. His gaze was searing, urging me to look up. I fought it as hard as I could but it was too compelling, too demanding. Vaguely I remembered the time when he put Vivian under his spell, making her do horrible deeds until her friends finally released her from his dark hold. I half wondered if he was doing the same thing to me now. But it didn’t matter, because my head
.was already lifting up
When my eyes were brought to eye-level with his, I froze. Everything in
…me froze. Because for the life of me I did not expect him to look so
He was tall. He sat on the throne like a king. His dark hair like a crown above his head. His hair was so dark and thick, it looked like it was made of shadows. And his eyes… one as red as blood and the other as if made of shadows. I looked straight into those eyes, both confusing and enchanting. I couldn’t look away. He looked like a 20 years old young man. Except… he wasn’t. He radiated raw power. Power so
.strong it almost flattened me to the floor
He may have looked all young and beautiful but I knew better. I knew
.he was a demon, the devil king, a being of dark power
He killed Quay – brave, innocent Quay. He destroyed Vivian’s village. He butchered and captured every last person in the revolutionary army.
.He beat me and brought me to my knees
So when I looked into his eyes, I didn’t care he thought I was Vivian – his greatest enemy. I didn’t care he was probably going to give the word to his minions to end me. I didn’t care about any of it. All I cared
.about was for him to see the hatred in my eyes
For a moment there, I could have sworn his lips twitched. Like my pure
.hatred amused him
He cocked his head to the side, regarding me as if I was a strange thing he had never before seen. And then, to my complete and utter shock,
:he opened his mouth and said
“?And who might you be”

Angel & Devil – Prologue
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תגובות (6)

סיפור נעים וזורם לקריאה.
לא ארוך מדי, לא קצר מדי, משלב מספיק גבוה ולא גבוה מדי.
הכל במינון הנכון ומוגש מקסים.
הסיפור כמו קוראיו תחת המילים שלך, האצבע שלך על ההדק ואת יודעת איך יורים.
מסקרן, מלא מידע ועם זאת לא מעיק.
מחכה לקרוא את ההמשך.

01/06/2020 09:00

    ואוו, תודה רבה! 🧡
    כל כך שמחה שאהבת :’)

    02/06/2020 11:46

יש לך כתיבה ממש מעניינת ויפה. אהבתי את זה שהסיפור זורם בקריאה וההצגת דמויות מתאימה ולא מתאמצת מידי.
זה נשמע מעניין, אני אישית אשמח להמשך אם כי אני לא יכולה להתחייב שאקרא בזמן (לאחרונה אני נעלמת הרבה, פחות פעילה מפעם)
אבל באמת שאהבתי מאוד ונשמע שיש לזה פונטציאל ממש טוב.

04/06/2020 20:04

    אהה, תודה! 🥺
    ריגשת אותי מאוד, זה נותן לי מוטבציה להמשיך.
    אני עוברת ביין תקופות פעילות ללא פעילות, ואני גם נוטה להעלם אז אני לגמרי מבינה אותך :’)
    שוב, תודה רבה!

    04/06/2020 21:03

wow! this is amazing! your writing is so so wonderful!
זואי, קפצתי להגיד שלום.
אני מאוד אוהבת סיפורי פנטזיה.
לא שכחתי ולו לרגע קט אותך ואת הסיפורים שלך. פשוט אני נמצאת בתקופה עמוסה ולא נושמת, והייתי חייבת לקרוא משהו שלך. תדעי לך שהתאפקתי הרבה זמן. אז הנה מצאתי את עצמי באמצע הלילה יושבת לקרוא (במקום ללמוד למבחן…) ואני שמחה שקפצתי לביקור הזה. בקיצר- תמשיכי!!!
ואשמח לתרגום למילה MC כי לא מצאתי פירוש מתאים לזה. לפי ההקשר, הבנתי שזה הקריין או משהו בסגנון, תקני אותי בבקשה אם אני טועה.
לילה טוב, קלואי.

23/07/2020 01:29

הזכרתי כבר שממש אהבתי את הרעיון שהסיפור הוא על בחורה שנשאבה לתוך הסיפור שהיא קראה והתחלפה עם הדמות הראשית? רעיון גאוני ומקורי!
מצפה בקוצר רוח להמשך :)

23/07/2020 01:31
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